blackattackbitch's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[MH16: MAC9]

Man, you've improved so much with this song!!!!

I remember listening to your other stuff, and listening to this is like listening to a whole new person.

There is one problem though....
That first viola, doesn't follow the chord well. It seems to be following a major chord while the rest of the song is following a minor chord.

Thats the only problem though. Everything else is amazing. I just hope it survives darkside555's list. There was quite a controversy last time, and this song is not particularly romantically joyous, so it may not survive. If it does though, don't be surprised if you do well.

Oh and if you have the time, check out the song I'm submitting. It's called Reunited. It's not done yet, but it will be in about 3 days.

FairSquare responds:

Thanks!
I really appreciate your review.
I'll be sure to check out your song :-)

MH16

[[oove] Heartbeats]

Excellent!

This is the second entry I've listened to in the Mac9 Jan/Feb so far. It seems that this contest is bringing out the best in all the entrants, as it should.

This song is great, but the only problem is that it may not be right for this contest. There is a way you could have made this song a little more joyous, which would have been to make more use of the major chord. It would have been quite easy to link to c-major from a-minor. Since the song sounds so sad though, it may not survive darkside555's lists.

Back to the reviewing aspect though, there's nothing I can tell you to improve on this song. This song is pretty much perfect, and way above my skill level. Keep up the good work!

broove responds:

It wasn't meant to be happy. In the forum I explained what I wanted to show. And I wouldn't say that it's way beyond your level - you have pretty good songs yourself...
Thanks for the review, mate ;)

[Dope - Act Like U Know Me]

Hate to say this, but...

The beat eclipsed the rap. The beat was fucking insane and make sure to tell Zajed I said that. However, while your lyrics were great, your voice was not.

One problem with your voice is probably the accent. Your voice sounds like you were trying not to sound too loud when you were recording it. Furthermore, it has the habit of getting really tinny at really bad places. Those elements completely clash with the feeling projected by the beat.

After :22, you can really hear the dialect problem. To be brutally honest, you sound like the whitest person in the world at that section. Your voice is a little high pitched too, so that underminds the style that you used in this song, which is decidedly tough.

But you added a lot of effects to this song in all the right places. The chorus, although it sounds just a little strained like you were tryna keep the volume low on your voice, still sounds great because of the echo and the extra voices overlaid on each other. All in all, this song is great, and you have a lot of potential.

[[LK] Lost (WiP)]

1 thing that stands out for me....

the fact that you completely ignored the restraints of bars, beats and such. I think it contributed well to the overall feeling of the piece. I have a feeling that you didn't, but I definitely can't capture the beat, so you did well at concealing it.
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The emotion conveyed by this song is amazing. It's peaceful, feels safe, tranquil. I don't know if that's the theme you were aiming for though, as you called your song lost. However, that's the theme you got. And the buildup towards the end resembles two loved ones finding each other.
Not much wrong with the song, I just think that the guitar at the end it a little too loud, considering that all the instruments are at full swing.

LK412 responds:

I didn't completely ignore it but i did put some notes off on purpose. And yea i have a tendency not to master my songs so yea the guitar was to loud. Thats the theme i was going for but i couldnt think of a name so i called it that. Thanks for the review. i noticed you didnt rate it. lol.

[The End of Technology Nears]

Have to agree with the person below me...

The ending needs some serious work. The last thing you want is a dull beginning. Honestly, it doesn't really feel like anything is really happening until thirty seconds.

The drumbeat was pretty different after :30. That's one of the things that held my attention in this song. The drumbeat was really creative.

But one thing I did not like was the repetitive sequence of the piano. Not so much the melody, but the fact that it kept hitting that D note constantly.

Furthermore, the guitar doesn't really blend in with the piano well. The guitar is an extremely high-energy instrument, as I see it, while the piano is a very stark contrast to the energy conveyed by the guitar, and vice versa.

And to talk about the guitar further, the entrance of the guitar and it's chord isn't really paved well, even though the drumbeat and the piano melody both enhanced prior to the guitar's entry.

Overall, 7|10 seems right.

fizzypop2 responds:

Thanks for the review man. I also noticed that annoyingly repetitive note and it bugged me for a while. A 7 is good enough for me coming from someone who has a ton of great music like yourself. My band is getting some work done on a decent song so maybe we'll cheaply (due to the cost of a decent microphone and equipment to go with it) record it in a few weeks when we get it worked out and smoothed down.

[Ancient Battle]

Good song overall, just a few problems.

1) There's a slight amount of clipping in the song toward the end, when the percussion really comes in heavily.
2) Halfway, the string instrument that's leading the melody seems to take on a weird chord separate from the chord presented by what I'm guessing is a chorus in the beginning of the song.

But I like alot of things about this song. For one, the percussion. For me, the percussion felt like the main part of this song, and it was amazingly powerful. Secondly, the first half of the song really impressed me. It was great. Not so great in the second half, what with the clipping and the loss of chord, but the drums took over in the second half, which was really good. And it had a good ending too.

Detonation3 responds:

thanks for being the first reviewer! Have u noticed how new songs have like 20 votes but not 1 review?! lol

[MH16: Clip-Hop]

Very ambient.

Very peaceful song, but not in an RnB type peaceful. I mean a pure ambient type of peaceful. It would be very difficult to rap on this though, because honestly, lyrics would only ruin the beat.

My only suggestion is that you add a little more variation to the drum sequence.

Sorry I can't do a more indepth review, I'm just tired today for some reason.

FairSquare responds:

Ok, thanks for the review :-)

[Night Battle]

Overall, a good piece.

However, if it had a melody, it would be amazing. Preferably lots of brass and very aggressive strings. THAT would propel this song to amazing heights.

Percussion is amazing, although it does seem offbeat sometimes.

Furthermore, it gets too noisy sometimes.

Lastly, the compressor seems a little weird. That needs to be improved.

[Never Put Down]

It's definitely a demo.

What I would recommend to you is that you turn the synths down. It's overwhelming everything else. And that weird brass-sounding instrument definitely should not come in at all when those synths are playing because it has no melodic resonance with either synths.

Another lesser problem is the chord progression. There's something that I don't like about it, but I can't put my finger on it.

Not too bad though, it sounds like a great beat to rap to. I hope the finished copy turns out as great as I think it will.

Treadz responds:

hey man thanks for a real good review

i agree with you the synths are downing everything.

this is very rough. were talking done in 30mins rough :P

i'll contact when im further on this project :)

peace

[MH16: Classic Experiment 2]

Unlike the people below me....

Imma actually do an actual critical review.

1) Bad choice of drums and drumbeat if you want to do classical. It ends up sounding more hiphop than classical. The drums need more reverb too. Instead of using a kick, you probably should have went with a tom if you lack a good orchestral drum set.
2) I don't like the flute melody. There's something about it that just doesn't match up for me. Maybe it's the way it clashes with the chords.
3) Sounds too basic for me, in terms of this being a classical piece. Classical is one of the hardest genres to compose. Trust me, I've done a few classical pieces. There's just a little too much looping for my tastes. Not varied enough. And that contributes to the hiphop feel of this song.

But it's not bad for a second attempt. The theme is good, the instrument choice contributes well to the theme, and the dynamics are okay.

And if you have any more classical pieces, let me know.

FairSquare responds:

Sorry, for the very VERY late response, but thanks for the review :-)