This is really good.
The only problems I can pick out:
The release on that accordion (I'm thinking that's what it is) is a little too short, even with the reverb.
The song is pretty repetitive.
But aside from that, this is an amazing orchestration. And you have really good samples, man. Really good samples.
Good intro too. And good outro. Those are probably the hardest things to do in a song. Trust me, I know, it took me quite a while to get those right.
Hmm well i disagree with your problems, but i respect your opinion and thank you for the review. Yea the intro/outro was tricky as I originally just had this for piano, and the idea of switching the theme with all the instruments came and it worked, but i agree those are very tough
I was gonna jump on you....
For classifying it as pop, but then I realized that it doesn't even matter. This song is fucking hilarious!
And aside from that, the music is amazing! I can't even turn my critical ear on because I was laughing so hard.
(harder....harder....don't tell me you're already done! Fucking golden!)
Okay, now time for the serious review.
Great instrument choice. Vocals sound comical though. I don't know whether that was intentional or not, but if you were going for a serious note on that part, didn't go too well lol.
Now on the orchestral part, the dynamics should have been stressed on that part. Instead, you had a few sections that were way too quiet and a few sections that weren't loud enough. And the guitar shouldn't stand out in lieu of all the epic instruments in the background.
But I have to say, I absolutely love this song.
10/10 5/5 faved and downloaded.
Nice mastering except for the orchestral part.
If you don't mind, could you check out my MAC9 second entry, Wine & Candlelight? I would appreciate that.
Thanx, really appreciate your words.
I edited today the info's about the track, so, check the "listener's guide to the penicorn's epic journey through love songs".
No serious things intended ;)
Very good song
You have a very indentifiable style in your chord progression choices sometimes, I may have to steal that progression lol.
In the beginning, it sounds like the bass note is on E at the start of the chord progression but later in the song, you realize that the chord progression was supposed to be C-D-E-D. That said, the piano melody is perfect in the beginnning but there needs to be something that clearly indicates the bass note. Maybe you could include a bass choir as a part of the pad in the background, which by the way sounds REALLY sick.
I don't know what piano you use, but it sounds really good for songs like this!
From 1:31 to 1:44 those two chord/scale changes are way too sudden. I would suggest smoothing them out by changing to a more favorable chord/scale or altering the final chord/scale before the change just slightly as to aid in the change.
And I have to say, that was a very smooth ending to the song.
Lastly, I know you don't know music theory and you just go by ear. Well neither do I lol. I just know a few of the terms after spending mucho time on this website. Like you, I was just messing around with what sounded good prior to that. Technically, I still am lol. I just did a lot of experimentation.
And that song Wine & Candlelight is finally finished, mastered, chorused, flanged, chopped, screwed, and raped. Check it out if you want to. I didn't bother resubmitting it though so you won't be able to review it, but I know you said you wanted to hear the finished product so I'm just lettin u know.
Til next time, sessile.
P.S. the piano volume sounds just about right to me.
well weather you think your a good music theorist or not, you probly the only person who reviews my songs from that standpoint, which i like, its a different way of looking at music
im not sure what you meant by the scales at 1:31, did you mean the chord progs from the chior being too sudden, or the change in the measures at 1:41?
the measure is only pitch altered one step up, if thats what your sayin
my chord prog method is actually quite machine-like, i always base the progs off of my melodies, which is good on one hand because the melody and choirs never really clash(somtimes), at the same time it leaves me somwhat limited in what i can do with them
ill def check out that track for ya man
thx for piano vol, i thought it wa fine too
peace man thx alot for review
There are very few songs that I can't pick apart
in my reviews, but your song breaks that mold completely. Everything about this song, including it's name, is sickening. Now let me attempt to break apart this song:
Good mixing of the bassline with the bass piano. I have to remember that technique for later songs.
On :29, that random high key shouldn't really be there.
Sickening drum beat. I would have liked a little more variance on it though, as well as less areas where the drums completely disappear. Instead of eliminating the drums on those sections, have the drumbeat tone down or become quieter on those sections.
As one other person said, the strings could have sounded a little more realistic. I, personally have a vast choice of strings and most of them sound suitably realistic. Try using papelmedia strings if you don't have the money for better strings. Otherwise, get EastWest or Miroslav, ya know?
Really good piano melody, I really like it, except for the aforementioned random high note.
I love the fact that you varied this song so much.
I think that finishes up my review. This really is an exceptional song, and I hope it stays at the top of the Hiphop-modern list for a very long time. (I say that because even though my song is at the top right now, I know it won't stay there for much longer, especially when it comes time for Weekly Best to come around.)
This ten is well-earned.
I like the way you review, very critical which is a good thing.
Anyway, the high key it's still correct even if it's so up high that sounds a bit particular, that's a matter of taste i guess but i like it eheh.
About the strings I'm going to check out the ones you told me even if I have some left that sound better like in "life's choices".
The disappearing of the beat is made because the guy that rapped on this wanted it to be like that so well it is like it is, I like it somehow because it gets your attention on the melody itself a bit more, but i get your point.
Thanks for the big review hope to see some other reviews on my stuff ;)
peace
Needs work, but it's on the right track.
First, I want to say that I loved the intro. I honestly can't tell you anything of value in that section although I would suggest adding a little bit more to the last 4 bars of the intro, although the intro is great as it stands.
Now after that is where it needs a little work. Now here's the note layout of the melody right now.
B-F#-D-G-C#-C#-D-F#
B-F#-D-G-B-B-D-C#
B-F#-D-G-C#-C#-D-F#
B-F#-D-G-E-E-C#-B
Now the synth at first (before the bass came in) suggested that the bassline would be:
B-B-G-G-G-G-F#-F#
Except for the last one:
B-B-G-G-G-G-B-B
So when the bassline comes in, it seems to clash with the melody in some sections. Especially in the part of the first and third melody, where it also clashes with the percieved bassline:
C#-C# (melody)
G-G (percieved bassline)
B (actual bassline)
The main problem is the fact that it clashes with the percieved bassline because I personally could never find a way to link those two notes together on a chord such as that one.
And the bassline seems out of tune. I don't know what it is about that bassline, but it sounds really weird.
Really nice drum, kick was good and hihats were smooth.
I put my all into this review because since this is a WIP, you'll need all the advice you can get.
this is probly the most loosly thrown together wip ive ever made, im sure that my synth melody is going to change drastically, since its not really complicated enough for my taste
the bass isnt fine tuned and i know why it sounds off, if i were to change the offbeat bass in the piano roll, then when i put it on higher pitched notes, the note actually goes by faster, and lower it goes by slower, i didnt want that, so i duplicated the offbeat bass for each and adjusted the pitch in the channel options(i think thats what there called, simply when you click on the instrument, some options pop up, idk how to explain), so the bass isnt completly tuned up, thats all
lol perceived bassline, actualy bassline, what it should be, what it is, what it should not be, idk much for music theory and most of those things(even though im stoked to take that class next year), i try to just make stuff that sounds good, and if it breaks the rules of what it should be, then w/e, but im not gona change up all my music, simply because the rules of theory say that my bassline should or should not be somthing, lol
i spent like an hour messing with drums, trying to find one with punch and a slight touch of distortion, i leikd my hats too :)
if i follow my usual habits of music making, then this song is going to end up drastically different than what it sounds like now, or hell i might not even finish it, im working on like 3 songs as it is..
peace thx for review
First of all:
The instruments sound very muddied. Turn down the reverb.
The drums are almost inaudible.
The acoustic instruments are very very good, but your command of them are lacking.
The Harpsicord at the bassline sounds really reallly bad. For the sake of your song, please change.
The drums are pretty bad, I would recommend changing them. One main aspect of the original was the sheer power of the drums.
I can hear a little clipping. Please fix that.
Also, try to pan your instruments so that not everything is sitting in the middle.
Lastly, not every instrument in the original was acoustic. Nor does every instrument in this version have to be. If you can't find a good instrument, then synthesize yourself one.
And in your version, you lose alot of the dynamics that made the original crazy good. I still enjoy the original personally.
And another note, you should really make the first note of the bassline inaudible, or obscured with the sound of the drums. That was another key feature in the original.
Please figure out what recomposition means.
There's no clipping, that must be you.
Everything is how I wanted it :) Nice post but i think i'll avoid the feedback.
Overall, a very good simple beat.
But I don't like bassline. It doesn't sound good at all.
Furthermore, you leave a lot of room for buildup in this song. Maybe that wasn't what you were going for, but if you wanted to, you could put higher tuned staccatos on this song and really FIRE IT UP! And you could enhance the drumbeat to something crazy at that point, make a monstrous chorus at that point.
I guess my main qualm with this song is that it lacks energy even though it sounds very tense.
But those staccatos really sound diesel, where'd you get those?
And you won't mind informing me when you upload your best beat, will you? I really wanna hear it, see if it inspires me to start rapping again.
thx for the advice man
i know what your talking about, but that problem i got with that is that ur lookin for a different type of beat than this really is
ur lookin for like some "lose yourself" type thing where it gets crazier and crazier
this is more for me like a laid back DRE type joint
as for the bass-line tho i'm interested in what you think would make it better
-Shek
List of things to change
1. change the piano. It sounds horrible and detuned. I really feel bad saying that because that's the main part of the song for you, but it really doesn't sound good at all.
2. Either lower the volume or compress the drums. I can hear clipping in there.
3. In the piano melody, where it goes Bb-F-C-Ab-D-Bb-C-D, The jump from Ab to D is not smooth at all. Furthermore, since the melody is so close to the bassline, the last two notes really sound bad when considering the chord that they're on. And it clashes with the higher piano key hits when they come into play.
4. 1:22 when the string melody comes in, it's hardly audible, in fact I would have missed it if I wasn't paying indepth attention to it.
5. The strings have a really bad loop. But that's not an emergency, that's just something I can pick up. Diff strings maybe?
And that sums up everything that needs to be changed. Things that should stay:
1. Chord progression: aids with the soft feeling of this song.
2. That melody with the strings, as long as it's turned up.
3. The high-key melody. It was really nice.
4. The drumbeat. Good choice with the drums. Just compress em.
5. Ending was good.
6. The beginning was good.
Thank you very much for that constructive criticism, blackattackbitch!
I'll work on that song soon. If the new version is finished, I'll contact you.^^
If you ever wanted to make high-quality music with low quality inexpensive shit, I'm the man to ask ;-)
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