blackattackbitch's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Happy Hardcore WIP]

Definitely happy

There's only a slight problem with the melody of the main synth. In the second half of the synth, when the root note is Eb, I noticed that the synth moves to F. That's pretty much the only problem in this whole song. And the second synth melody around 1:00 has a problem in the beginning of the progression in that it doesn't match the bassline. It's only a couple notes though. That's pretty much it.

Other than that, I can't really think of anything else. The song was pretty much good. However, this is not my genre of expertise, so the advice is limited. I hope I was at least a little helpful.

SigmaSpore responds:

yeah my second melody doesnt really fit right now, and i dont really know the "rules" as well as you do, so i dont know what notes would fit into a different melody, while still being able to move back to the first melody

lol you and your theory xD

thanks for review man, peace to the out

[7X - Crescent]

Lol MillsApparatus.....

Don't know whether to laugh or cry in response to that guy....

Nevertheless, there is something off about this song that I can't put my penis- er I mean finger on....so I'll keep listening until I figure out what it is.

Nice violin playing, it pretty much shits on my abilities at the stringed instrument.

I got what's off with the song! Many places don't have a clear bassline instrument, so what happens is it sounds like it's on a different chord than it actually is. You might do well by putting a soft Dbass staccato as the bassline.

Also, the choir might be a tad bit too powerful.

And that sums up my review pretty much. Good work, and keep it up!

EbonHawk7X responds:

thatnks for the helpfull review!

[Sigh Like The Wind]

Hey man! Long time no see!

Sorry, but the highest I can give this is a seven. There's several reasons:

As said by the first reviewer, the instruments don't really get an opportunity to express themselves. They all kinda blend with one another in monotony.
And to add to the bit of monotony, there isn't much dynamics in this piece. It sounds the same volume throughout.
And the chord choice through the beginning was a bit overused. I hear that progression on many a song, and while it is a very pleasing progression, it doesn't make a person stand out as an individual artist.
Also, there may be too many instruments in the middle octaves. In fact, there may be too many instruments going at one time. It's usually good to have a clear instrument that carries the melody.
Another thing hit me: The lack of drums. This isn't a problem at all, but there's also no instrument articulation, so this may actually be a major problem. If there were drums, you could probably set these instruments as a kind of background ambience and have the drums carry the song the rest of the way.

But your saving grace is this:
Other than the first chord progression, the rest of the song is pretty alright, especially when the pianos come in.

I hope I was helpful in this review. If you need any more help, just shoot me a PM.

Viperodriguez responds:

Thank you for your input. I agree with much of what you had to say. I've been having a pretty hard time with this track for awhile. I just can't seem to find mood or inspiration make this what I want it to be. I actually did add a drum part, but I thought it emulated Ryan Tedder a bit. Reviews like is the reason why I submitted this tune in the first place. Again, thanks for the feedback.

[Penguin Collision]

Pretty good

The most significant thing I have to mention about this song is the detuned saw. You're really gonna have to apply some fine tuning on that because it changes the whole feeling of the song up to that point. Plus it's very overpowering. In addition, when the saw is fading away, it leaves some clipping behind.

Yeah, someone already mentioned the drums, so I'll say nothing else on that.

After that beginning with the telephone sound, around :29, it throws one off because the synth sounds so much crisper and even has reverb on it, whereas previously the synth sounded dry and old-fashioned. What I'm trying to say is that the transition between those two sections needs to be smoother.

The ambient section is great, easily my favorite part of the song, although it kinda knocks it out of the dance classification.

With the exception of the detuned saw section, I like the feeling I get from this song. It's weird, like kinda peaceful, you know? I could chill to the ambience of this song.

That sums up this review. Oh and could you do me a favor and check out my newest WIP, revolution II? Yes, I actually did end up recomposing that old song, I was surprised myself. Peace out bro!

SigmaSpore responds:

yeah i see what your sayin on the reeverb of the intro, that probly would have been better

i think i might go find some finetuning and edit this track...

ill check that track out asap

peace to you

[MH16: Racing The Sun]

Rock...damn.....

I know I'm gonna mess up something in this review because I don't know anything about Rock. It's the one genre I've never experimented with or even bothered to listen to often. (Or even occasionally lol)

But this song feels like it's missing something. It might be because most of the song is the bass and guitar. And furthermore, the guitar's short notes make the song sound kind of empty.

And the guitar does sound a bit weird, maybe more FX on it, that's a good way to get a nice-sounding guitar, especially if you're using FL Slayer.

I'm gonna leave it at that because, like I said, I'm stupid when it comes to rock music. But I can't leave without saying what's good about this song:

Acoustic guitar and the sections surrounding it. That was nice as hell, probably my favorite part of the song.

Drums, as always. Aside from the compressor messing with the snare roll a bit, they were perfect.

That cool effect with the bassline. I have no idea how you did that, but it sounds pretty cool.

Whew, it's late. I'm headin out. Peace!

FairSquare responds:

Lol, you don't HAVE to review if you think you can't say anything helpful :P
Not that you didn't say anything helpful though, the advice you gave is actually very helpful :-)
And i don't use FL Slayer, i use Nexus. FL Slayer is... well... not really usable for me :P
Thanks for the review! :D

[MH16: Playing In The Sand]

Hellagood XD

Sorry it took me so long to review that I actually missed out on two of your tracks, been working on a new song, the WIP of which is already up.

This is a nice song, perfect for a kid's game or a T.V. show.

The best advice I can think of at the moment, and you might think I'm crazy for saying this, but try replacing that guitar sample with a saxophone. That's the #1 advice I can give you.

Other than that, the flute kinda blends in with the synth. However, it occurred to me that the current tuning of the instruments is the best tuning, so this might be the best choice musically.

Which reminds me, excellent choice of instruments. Absolutely excellent.

It gets a little bit crazy after 1:20 because a huge collection of instruments start playing simultaneously. However, that may not be too much of a problem since the guitar is still very audible, which at that moment is the most important instrument.

I believe that sums up my review. The intro and outro is nicely done, mix is good, drums are exceptional as normal, everything is in order. On to the next song!

FairSquare responds:

A saxophone?
I can try that :-)
Thanks for the review!

[Vandetta Hardstyle]

Nice! Creative!

Glad I came back after the two minutes of silence thing too, so that I can write my best review possible too!

I'll review this in parts.

Glitch
- Believe it or not, the voice clips sound like they're on the E note. Just saying that because when the next section comes along, it sounds like a sudden chord change. Other than that, nice slicing of the voice clip. It sounds sickening.

Hardstyle
- The timing of something is off. I can't put my finger on it, but I know something isn't completely timed right. But other than that, this section is top notch.

Ambient
- The transition has a little bit of clipping, although that might just be a result of the fadeout effect. Other than that, it was an excellent transition into and out of the section. And the voice in the background made for an interesting effect.

Jumpstyle
- There was an undertone that didn't match the bassline, and that messed with me a bit. But I don't know anything about jumpstyle in the least bit, so that could be how it's supposed to be. But otherwise, that section would be damn good too.

The thing that gets me about this song is that you went to four different genres and still managed to keep it pretty unified. That's the biggest plus for me, as well as the instruments in this one.

And sorry it took me so long to review, I've been busy the last few days.

SigmaSpore responds:

glitch- yeah its prety much impossible for me to match a glitch seciton with a specific scale or chord prog, i mean i could alter pitches, but there are alot of different glitch sounds i used so i didnt even bother

hardstyle- hmm idk what you might be hearing that would be off, i mean the three melodies dont flow together perfectly, i tried to just make one melody, then build, then build again on the next one, but i didnt keep to that with all three melodies, but i dont think it should cause to much issue, so idk what you might be getting

ambient- actually im sure there is a little clipping and im posative its from the filter fade, but i dont really know how to smooth out filter fade transition, any tips on that?, i know you might not do them alot in classical but you might know somthin
and yeah that voice in the background i think really kept it from getting too boring b4 the jumpstyle explosion, nice reeverb and delays...tasty...

jumpstyle- im almost 100% posative that i dont have a bassline in there, i mean i might have made one and forgot to delete it, but ive never heard a jumpstyle song with a bassline with the kicks, cuz the kicks are what create the bassline, and i cant check right now cuz i dont have speakers on this pc right now

im glad you think it all remained unified cuz i was actually worried that ppl would be like, omg cant keep focus on the song it just goes everywhere to crazy, so its good i got that all right

no problem on the long review time, doesnt bother me in the slightest :)

you got any tracks comin my way any time soon???

peace

[Royal Ruskie - Blackout Redone]

Here comes review number 2.

First of all, mashups aren't your work and aren't allowed on newgrounds. I suggest taking it down yourself so that you don't get your whole account deleted by forcing an administrator to take it down for you.

Now that that's been discussed, your song needs a lot of work on many fronts:

Reverb once again- Way too high, muddies the sound. lower decay to a maximum of 2 seconds or lower the wet signal.
Melody- Repeats throughout the whole song. I suggest switching it up.
Voice sample- Illegal according to NG's terms of service, unless you have explicit permission by the artist to do such a mix with that song.
Sound effect- that sound effect at :22 does not match the bassline nor the melody, considering it's a C note and the song is composed of these 4 notes: D-Eb-F-G, so it should either be playing G or D. Hell, even A would be a better fit.
Bassline- most of the time, there's no bassline, but when there is, it doesn't fit the melody at all.
Synth- I hardly lodge this complaint, but it's too er, well, blockish. It's like the attack and release parameters are set to the lowest values possible. Also, the saw may be a little too detuned, making the note a little hard to discern for me anyways. (perfect pitch is a bitch when the instrument is playing several pitches at the same time....)
The drums aren't all that spectacular.

I'm sorry, but I can't help you that much, there's too much to work on and this isn't even my genre of choice. Feel free to PM me on specifics, but in the end experience will do you much more good than my words will.

[Modernization demo #2]

Now I'm not a hardstyle expert....

contrary to public opinion apparently haha O_o'?

But I do know my way around a music track. And specifically, I would make these suggestions to improve this track:

-I find that a 4/4 time signature is much better for dancing. And that goes for the synth too.
-Talking about the synth, it gets boring after a while. I would suggest adding some effects so that it's not the same sound throughout.
-Talking about effects, the reverb is wayyyyy too high, I would suggest lowering the decay time considerably, or lowering the wet signal significantly.
-The bassline synth doesn't match the melody, which seems to mostly follow 3 note chords. Also, the bassline is really quiet, even with my mdr-v150 headphones.
-I don't know, it just feels like there should be more than just that one synth playing a melody or chord. You could have something in the background, or put this main synth in the background and have a different synth take up a slower legato melody.
-The drums are pretty powerful, but in terms of creativity, they're not all that spectacular. No nice hihat sequences and nothing with a snare or anything like that, just the kick. I suggest adding a hi-hat sequence at some point or adding snares to introduce different sections, or percussion effects, you know?
-Intro is your sticking point in this one. You spend a full 45 seconds on just that one synth repeating notes over and over again. Combined with the massive amount of reverb, the intro buries this song pretty badly. You have to change something at least within the first 30 seconds to retain interest, like add another synth melody, improve the melody significantly, or add slight drums.

This is the first song I've checked out though, and you've already said that it's a WIP, so I hope that my advice was pretty helpful. Sorry for the low grade, but I can't go easy on anyone.

[Tri-Battle]

This has the potential to be an amazing song

There's only a few things holding it back.

Reverb- not nearly enough. The lack of reverb is very noticable in the snares, which sound absolutely dry.
Timpani- Having it play A over again even when the bassline had moved to D was probably not a great musical choice.
Mix- Too many instruments in the same octave range. In particular, the section around and following :56, when the trumpet, violin, and organ are all playing at the same time, nothing stands out.
Ending- Way too abrupt.

But well done emphasizing dynamics and great choices. Those two are the main pluses on this piece. If those changes above are implemented though, you could have the next top30 song!

LacrimosaMuse responds:

wow, there should definatly be more reviews like this on newgrounds. I have actually worked on a new version of this song that im using as a theme for Cerberus in my Niburu soundtrack, and I'll definatly take the things youve said into consideration when im putting the final touches on it