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[Battle Music Two (FF9)]

First of all:

The instruments sound very muddied. Turn down the reverb.
The drums are almost inaudible.
The acoustic instruments are very very good, but your command of them are lacking.
The Harpsicord at the bassline sounds really reallly bad. For the sake of your song, please change.
The drums are pretty bad, I would recommend changing them. One main aspect of the original was the sheer power of the drums.
I can hear a little clipping. Please fix that.
Also, try to pan your instruments so that not everything is sitting in the middle.
Lastly, not every instrument in the original was acoustic. Nor does every instrument in this version have to be. If you can't find a good instrument, then synthesize yourself one.
And in your version, you lose alot of the dynamics that made the original crazy good. I still enjoy the original personally.
And another note, you should really make the first note of the bassline inaudible, or obscured with the sound of the drums. That was another key feature in the original.

viion responds:

Please figure out what recomposition means.
There's no clipping, that must be you.

Everything is how I wanted it :) Nice post but i think i'll avoid the feedback.

[Killah-]

Overall, a very good simple beat.

But I don't like bassline. It doesn't sound good at all.

Furthermore, you leave a lot of room for buildup in this song. Maybe that wasn't what you were going for, but if you wanted to, you could put higher tuned staccatos on this song and really FIRE IT UP! And you could enhance the drumbeat to something crazy at that point, make a monstrous chorus at that point.

I guess my main qualm with this song is that it lacks energy even though it sounds very tense.

But those staccatos really sound diesel, where'd you get those?

And you won't mind informing me when you upload your best beat, will you? I really wanna hear it, see if it inspires me to start rapping again.

Two-Shekel responds:

thx for the advice man

i know what your talking about, but that problem i got with that is that ur lookin for a different type of beat than this really is

ur lookin for like some "lose yourself" type thing where it gets crazier and crazier

this is more for me like a laid back DRE type joint

as for the bass-line tho i'm interested in what you think would make it better

-Shek

[~|| Strange Feelings]

List of things to change

1. change the piano. It sounds horrible and detuned. I really feel bad saying that because that's the main part of the song for you, but it really doesn't sound good at all.
2. Either lower the volume or compress the drums. I can hear clipping in there.
3. In the piano melody, where it goes Bb-F-C-Ab-D-Bb-C-D, The jump from Ab to D is not smooth at all. Furthermore, since the melody is so close to the bassline, the last two notes really sound bad when considering the chord that they're on. And it clashes with the higher piano key hits when they come into play.
4. 1:22 when the string melody comes in, it's hardly audible, in fact I would have missed it if I wasn't paying indepth attention to it.
5. The strings have a really bad loop. But that's not an emergency, that's just something I can pick up. Diff strings maybe?

And that sums up everything that needs to be changed. Things that should stay:
1. Chord progression: aids with the soft feeling of this song.
2. That melody with the strings, as long as it's turned up.
3. The high-key melody. It was really nice.
4. The drumbeat. Good choice with the drums. Just compress em.
5. Ending was good.
6. The beginning was good.

T-Free responds:

Thank you very much for that constructive criticism, blackattackbitch!
I'll work on that song soon. If the new version is finished, I'll contact you.^^

[(Your) Absolution [2]]

I agree with all of the points of the guy below me

But I'll go even further than that. The drums don't really match the song. You need better drum samples. Furthemore, I would like to see more dynamics in your song, it feels like it was just compressed for loudness.

Otherwise, really good song. Keep it up!

Stolkmen5000 responds:

Really?

I thought the drums were ok for what I could find in my crappy library. If you know of any cheap yet great software for instruments or for just composing, I wouldn't mind getting it.

All I've got is crappy GarageBand and Logic, which are the only Mac things I can get. My Sibelius software is currently dead and I will try to revive that someday.

Anyway, TY for the review. I will take it into consideration when I attempt to compose a third version of this song. So far everyone likes the first.

[Is This True Love? (Piano)]

Well-constructed piece.

The only two things I can think of to change in this song would be that you lower the attack of the piano in certain sections, if your program allows for the keys to sound as if they've been played softer. That would really convey the feeling of love. Also, around 1:04, the main melody jumps from lower keys to keys 1 octave higher. It probably would have been better if it had flowed to the higher octave.

Other than that, excellent work. You captured the essence of love perfectly with this piece. Good thing that those artists gave you such *ahem* great inspiration....lol jk ;p

Keep it up man, I doubt I need to tell you that you have the potential to be an amazing artist if you stick with it.

Zero123Music responds:

Yep, ok - the velt should have been lower I agree :p
but I did try putting that 1:04 in the same octave - but it clashed with the left hand, leaving it feeling horrible. I would of had to jump the octave sometime - and I found that was the best part to do it

Though I should have left it in the original octave to see what it would sound like - cause you are probably right ^^

thanks for the 10!
>>Zero

[Our Epic Journey]

Honestly don't know what Marks-a-lot is smokin'

But I think this song is smokin, on a creative scale. Great chord choice, lovely powerful melody, nice everything. You definitely have one hell of a future in music.

I can't think of any suggestions except maybe these:

At some point in this track, put some kind of amazing ensemble in there.
Add a slight bit more reverb. Careful though, you don't want to blur the instruments too much.

Now onto general things:
1) A midi rip is when somebody takes a midi file, imports it into their DAW, replaces the instruments, and claims it as their own work. Many of the "Videogame Remixes" on this site are nothing more than midi rips.
2)The choice of brass staccato and the snare drums make this sound like a middle-ages theme, hence why it's reminiscent to zelda.
3) Once again, YOU'RE ONLY 13!!!!?!?!?!? HOLY CRAP!!!! You will be amazing by the time you hit your senior year in highschool. Once again, I predict a very bright future for you.

Zero123Music responds:

Yes, a bit more reverb - I did try reverb :)
I have just the idea of the ensemble - like maybe some high strings about halfway through - on the second main section?

Thankyou!!! I'm glad someone liked it :)

Now - for my response to general things ;)
1)I am truly shocked at what all the remixes are.. Those people are nothing but cheap skates who can't think of something original, which is the beauty of the NGAP.
Well - for me, this song is most certainly NOT a MIDI rip - never would I ever dream of it. Original tune and everything, started from scratch ;-)
2) Ah, thanks for clearing that up - I was wondering the relation.
3)Thankyou!! Alot, I try my hardest and reviews like this make me feel it's starting to pay off.
I think you are extremely talented also - and please PM me about a song you feel is pretty good when you upload it :)

Thankyou
>>Zero

[MH16: MAC9 #2 -Editable-]

Sickening!

Such a joyful tune, man this song is amazing. Nice chord progression man. My suggestions though are to smooth up the intro and ending. The intro isn't bad, just needs a touchup. The outro is too abrupt though, it seems to end in the middle of a melody.

Nice drums man. Really nice drums.

All in all, this deserves its ten. Each time, your songs get better and better. And it's not like they get slightly better, it's like they get better by leaps and bounds.

FairSquare responds:

To do list:
-Make the intro better
-Make outro better

Really thanks for this review!!!
I appreciate it :-)
MH16

[Sons of the Exodus I: Boreas]

You are redefining the DnB genre with this song

This song sounds so unique. The choice of instruments and the chord progression in certain parts of the song contribute to this greatly.

Good mix with the drums. The drums sound really really good.

The ending should have had another low piano key hit instead of ending with just the high pitched key. That would have been a smoother ending.

With the exception of the above-mentioned end and a few chord changes that weren't too smooth, this is a damn good song. Nice name too lol.

Keep it up!

SessileNomad responds:

thanks man, i tried my best on this, i agree some of chord progs. on my choir were a litle weird but w/e
peace man